[Tinyos-alliance] TEP 120

[stankovic at cs.virginia.edu]

My corrections and questions by section

Sect  1  -  OK

Sect 2
    "solutions that implemented without need"  ->  solutions that are  
implemented
       without the need for ...

     adn  ->   and

     "have strong role"  ->  have a strong role

     "In Apache the technical ..."   rewrite this sentence

      "  see to "  ->   seek to

     "We recognize that the allinace and serve a "  ->  something wrong here
               maybe  just   We recognize that the alliance serves

Sect 3  OK

Sect 4.1   "regular Allinace meetings."  should we say something about the
                   expected frequency  - once per year?

Sect 5

     "have essential role" ->  have an essential role

      aditionally  ->  additionally

     "Corporations and organizational "  ->  Corporations and organizations

      Corporation or institutional ..  ->  A Corporation or   (change for both
          bulleted items)

      do we want to say what a small versus large company is?

      last sentence  "We will provide a fee ..."   just delete this  
sentence here

sect 6

     excel  ->  excelled

     the steering committe will be engaged in ratification  standards...how?
                should we say something about this here?

sect 7

      there will be a mechanism for contributing IP .... what is that
            mechanism; is it described sect 8?  or elsewhere

     where working group determine that  ->   where a working group determines

      viral licensing  ->  is this term well defined and known; is it common
            knowledge or should we expand

Sect 8

     standing open  ->  standing upon

    oblicated  ->  obligated

     sacrafice  ->  sacrifice

    realtively  ->  relatively

   "use of the term"  ->  use of the TinyOs term

   the Alliance will have a preferred source license ... where? when?

    generation of list  ->  generation of a list
    reference implementation ->  reference implementations

   Alliance is not  ->  The Alliance is not

    that allows  ->  that allow

sect 9  OK

sect 10  OK

sect 11

    last sentence in first par.  - reword - confusing



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